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 Forbidden Freedom - A P4L Story... - Chapter 3

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PostSubject: Forbidden Freedom - A P4L Story... - Chapter 3   Sun Jan 20, 2013 5:17 pm

Chapter 3 - Sky-High
POV - Sky - SkyDriver

I woke up this morning feeling... tired. Ever since this secret organisation was put together, I've been getting less and less sleep...

It's all the Diabolus' fault! When he showed up and started taking everyone as prisoners, we had to get together as a secret organisation (Or as Arieon calls it - The P4L) and take him on!... But this is starting to tire me.

Anyways, I'm on a mission to find The Shards of Guidance, just to find out where this Diabolus Guy is...

So, with a little help from Ignis (My Salamence), I'm on my way to an area known as Willow Woods. It's a nice, peaceful place, with many pokemon living there - mainly Ghost types.

It took me awhile to get here, and it seems... silent. Why would there be a Guidance Shard here? Ignis lands in a somewhat large clearing and I drop off. Now I have to find that Shard! Ignis follows me as a walk on ahead...

After about half an hour of walking, Ignis suddenly stops following me and begins running to something in the distance! "Hey Ignis! You found something" I shout to him. I sprint after him until I spot what Ignis had found... It was a kid!

He seemed to be in a bad way. He was just lay here! I tried to wake him up but he wasn't moving at all... I checked his pulse... He was still alive...

"Rhyperior!!" Erupted a sudden noise! I turned around to see a monsterous Rhyperior! Its eyes looked ferocious... This was the Diabolus' doing... It seemed to be after the kid! Suddenly The Rhyperior was Charging at us! "Ignis!" I called, and Ignis took on the Rhyperior! Ignis sent the Rhyperior dizzy with a well aimed Dragon Claw! But the Rhyperior was still Going, and retaliated with Rock Blast! Ignis was stunned by the hit and had to rest off... Which left the Rhyperior free to attack us! The Rhyperior Sent a fully-charged Rock Blast in my direction! It was too late to dodge... but suddenly I felt something grab at my ankle! And the Rock Blast... went through me... Urgh man that felt weird! But how did I do that?... And then I noticed what it was at my ankle! It was the kid! How did he do that?! He struggled to stand up, so I helped him. "Hey, are you alright?" I asked. "I don't think theres time for questions! Look!" He replied and I remembered that the Rhyperior was still there! Ignis was at a Disadvantage here! He was weak to the Rhyperior's Rock type moves! But then the kid said "Nidoprince! Help!" and he sent out his own Pokemon! It was a... Nidorino (Such a fitting name I guess). The Nidorino Started to dash Towards the Rhyperior and used a Powerful Drill Run! The Rhyperior was dazed by the attack, and Fainted! "Nido!" the small Nidorino cheered gleefuly!

"So what's your name kid?" I finnaly asked. "I'm Lewis! What's your's?" He replied. "Sky" I said. "Thats an awesome name!" Lewis said.

"So what were you doing here? That Rhyperior was after you!" I questioned. Lewis answered "I was planning on getting out of here! But then that Rhyperior hit me with it's Rock Blast... It even destroyed my Treehouse!" I said "Well... that's pretty unfortunate, you need any help?" Lewis replied "Yeah... Please"

I told Lewis about the Diabolus, and how he was planning on taking over the world...

"So... what are we supposed to do about it? We can't let everyone become prisoners!" Lewis said in responce to my statement. I said in reply "Well... I'm part of a secret organisation called P4L. We're basically trying to stop him from doing all this! You know... we need all the help we can get... so... if you want to... you could join us." Suddenly, Lewis got exciteed and said "Of course I'll help you! but... I don't know how helpful I'd be..." I said "And help we get is helpful! We're looking for things called Guidance Shards! Don't suppose you've seen any?" I asked. Lewis answered "Well, the only shard that I've seen is this" and he handed me... A Guidance Shard! "Where did you find this?!" I questioned. "Prince found it when we were playing hide and seek... is it useful?" Lewis asked. "It's the most usseful thing you could ever give me!" I answered joyfully! Then Lewis asked "Even more useful than my Jaffa-Cake maker?" I was somewhat baffled by what Lewis just said, but I didn't care! I had one of the Guidance Shards!

"We should start making our way back to base!" I said. "Sure!" Lewis replied but suddenly, after taking a step Lewis winced in pain and clutched his leg! "Is that where that Rhyperior hit you?" I asked whilst helping him to keep stable. "Yeah..." He replied. I called Ignis to us and helped Lewis get onto him. "Nido..." Cried the Nidorino... He was looking with worried eyes at his owner... "Sorry I returned you to your ball before Prince, I couldn't run fast enough with you in my arms!" Lewis chuckled!

Nidoprince and Myself Got onto Ignis, who had recovered from the battle, and returned to the base...

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PostSubject: Re: Forbidden Freedom - A P4L Story... - Chapter 3   Sun Jan 20, 2013 5:43 pm

Impressive how you write in different perspectives :3 And accurately chosen name in Diabolus Wink Can't wait till next chapter Very Happy
2 questions though: whats POV? (nvm got it) and didn't you get on Ignis' back?

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PostSubject: Re: Forbidden Freedom - A P4L Story... - Chapter 3   Mon Jan 21, 2013 3:27 am

good chapter. Seems better than last one, not as many random capital letters, but still some.
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PostSubject: ...   Mon Jan 21, 2013 5:17 am

Where are the random caps? XD

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PostSubject: Re: Forbidden Freedom - A P4L Story... - Chapter 3   Mon Jan 21, 2013 2:31 pm

Lewis Big Benn wrote:
Chapter 3 - Sky-High
POV - Sky - SkyDriver

I woke up this morning feeling... tired. Ever since this secret organisation was put together, I've been getting less and less sleep...

It's all the Diabolus' fault! When he showed up and started taking everyone as prisoners, we had to get together as a secret organisation (Or as Arieon calls it - The P4L) and take him on!... But this is starting to tire me.

Anyways, I'm on a mission to find The Shards of Guidance, just to find out where this Diabolus Guy is...

So, with a little help from Ignis (My Salamence), I'm on my way to an area known as Willow Woods. It's a nice, peaceful place, with many pokemon living there - mainly Ghost types.

It took me awhile to get here, and it seems... silent. Why would there be a Guidance Shard here? Ignis lands in a somewhat large clearing and I drop off. Now I have to find that Shard! Ignis follows me as a walk on ahead...

After about half an hour of walking, Ignis suddenly stops following me and begins running to something in the distance! "Hey Ignis! You found something" I shout to him. I sprint after him until I spot what Ignis had found... It was a kid!

He seemed to be in a bad way. He was just lay here! I tried to wake him up but he wasn't moving at all... I checked his pulse... He was still alive...

"Rhyperior!!" Erupted a sudden noise! I turned around to see a monsterous Rhyperior! Its eyes looked ferocious... This was the Diabolus' doing... It seemed to be after the kid! Suddenly The Rhyperior was Charging at us! "Ignis!" I called, and Ignis took on the Rhyperior! Ignis sent the Rhyperior dizzy with a well aimed Dragon Claw! But the Rhyperior was still Going, and retaliated with Rock Blast! Ignis was stunned by the hit and had to rest off... Which left the Rhyperior free to attack us! The Rhyperior Sent a fully-charged Rock Blast in my direction! It was too late to dodge... but suddenly I felt something grab at my ankle! And the Rock Blast... went through me... Urgh man that felt weird! But how did I do that?... And then I noticed what it was at my ankle! It was the kid! How did he do that?! He struggled to stand up, so I helped him. "Hey, are you alright?" I asked. "I don't think theres time for questions! Look!" He replied and I remembered that the Rhyperior was still there! Ignis was at a Disadvantage here! He was weak to the Rhyperior's Rock type moves! But then the kid said "Nidoprince! Help!" and he sent out his own Pokemon! It was a... Nidorino (Such a fitting name I guess). The Nidorino Started to dash Towards the Rhyperior and used a Powerful Drill Run! The Rhyperior was dazed by the attack, and Fainted! "Nido!" the small Nidorino cheered gleefuly!

"So what's your name kid?" I finnaly asked. "I'm Lewis! What's your's?" He replied. "Sky" I said. "Thats an awesome name!" Lewis said.

"So what were you doing here? That Rhyperior was after you!" I questioned. Lewis answered "I was planning on getting out of here! But then that Rhyperior hit me with it's Rock Blast... It even destroyed my Treehouse!" I said "Well... that's pretty unfortunate, you need any help?" Lewis replied "Yeah... Please"

I told Lewis about the Diabolus, and how he was planning on taking over the world...

"So... what are we supposed to do about it? We can't let everyone become prisoners!" Lewis said in responce to my statement. I said in reply "Well... I'm part of a secret organisation called P4L. We're basically trying to stop him from doing all this! You know... we need all the help we can get... so... if you want to... you could join us." Suddenly, Lewis got exciteed and said "Of course I'll help you! but... I don't know how helpful I'd be..." I said "And help we get is helpful! We're looking for things called Guidance Shards! Don't suppose you've seen any?" I asked. Lewis answered "Well, the only shard that I've seen is this" and he handed me... A Guidance Shard! "Where did you find this?!" I questioned. "Prince found it when we were playing hide and seek... is it useful?" Lewis asked. "It's the most usseful thing you could ever give me!" I answered joyfully! Then Lewis asked "Even more useful than my Jaffa-Cake maker?" I was somewhat baffled by what Lewis just said, but I didn't care! I had one of the Guidance Shards!

"We should start making our way back to base!" I said. "Sure!" Lewis replied but suddenly, after taking a step Lewis winced in pain and clutched his leg! "Is that where that Rhyperior hit you?" I asked whilst helping him to keep stable. "Yeah..." He replied. I called Ignis to us and helped Lewis get onto him. "Nido..." Cried the Nidorino... He was looking with worried eyes at his owner... "Sorry I returned you to your ball before Prince, I couldn't run fast enough with you in my arms!" Lewis chuckled!

Nidoprince and Myself Got onto Ignis, who had recovered from the battle, and returned to the base...
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PostSubject: ...   Mon Jan 21, 2013 3:45 pm

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PostSubject: Re: Forbidden Freedom - A P4L Story... - Chapter 3   Tue Jan 22, 2013 3:35 am

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PostSubject: Re: Forbidden Freedom - A P4L Story... - Chapter 3   Sat Jan 26, 2013 8:18 pm

Very cool and enjoyable piece of writing.
One thing that got me wondering was "Peaceful place that has mainly Ghosts living in there", sounds a bit odd to me. :p
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PostSubject: ....   Sun Jan 27, 2013 9:06 am

They're nice ghosts..... XD

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